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Thursday, December 3, 2015

Paper #3 Final Draft

Christopher Burning
English 101-5:30
Dr. Sonia Begert
11/26/15
Photoshop, the Power of God in Your Hands: For Good or for Evil?
          
              Advances in technology in the recent years have given people the power to transform the way others look to their desire. Initially it wasn’t something to be too concerned about. However, as people have learned these programs and as they have advanced, more is now possible than before with Photoshop. Transformations to models on magazines are now so unobtainable due to Photoshop that it’s causing more harm than good, both mentally and physically. So, is Photoshop for the better or for the worse in this day and age?
            Images have always been altered, well before Photoshop. In the New York Times article concerning PhotoShopping of models, Eric Wilson indicates that the amount of PhotoShopping that happens now is astounding. Images have always been effected in one way or another. Whether that be the use of lighting, exposure, angles but more recently software. The use of software in this age has taken models to the point of unrealistic and unreachable levels of perfection. In some ways they look like creatures from another planet. I surveyed ten of my good friends and family through Facebook and asked, “Do you believe that the Photoshoping of models on magazine covers accurately represents what is obtainable or do you think they're outlandish”? Every single one of the people who responded thought that the use of Photoshop as it is today, is outlandish and too extreme. Furthering onto the idea that Photoshop has been taken to the extreme Vivian Diller, Ph.D, wrote an article in the Huffington Post and quoted The American Medical Association saying, “alterations made through processes like Photoshop can contribute to unrealistic body image expectations, eating disorders and other emotional problems”. So considering it can cause a slew of physical and mental disorders and it being completely outlandish, what’s the positivity of it?
            Well according to Alice Chen, for the use of Photoshop on models, in HerCampus website, the author states, “As an editorial publication, a magazine strives to meet its standards of perfection. In the same way that an article passes through the hands of multiple editors, a photo experiences a meticulous retouching process in order to represent the best version of itself. And like the words in a written piece may change during the process, the colors, textures, shapes and other details of a photo may be altered without losing what that image is at its core”. However, consider the amount of altering a photo can go through for an ad, not even a magazine cover but just an ad. The ways in which an image can be altered is astounding. They can change the skin color, lip color, eye color, remove blemishes, extend the length of the persons’ body, change breast size, eye size, hip and waist size including many more possibilities not listed. So if all of those things are changed has the image really kept what it is at its core? Why should a photo have to go through retouching to represent the best version of itself? If an image is to really represent itself, let it represent reality and not a fantasy that Photoshop force feeds you. Another argument that is prevalent is that if Photoshop wasn’t allowed to be used on models or in magazines, or in ads that it would put many people out of jobs. Yes, that would be true, many people would lose their jobs, but with the marketing being the way it is, instantly there would a large demand in photographers or makeup artists so, yes, it would destroy jobs but at the same time it would create the same amount that were lost, if not more. Another point that comes from opposing side is that without the use of Photoshop makeup sales would drop, or anything that uses enhanced images to sell their product. However, as mentioned earlier Photographs have always been altered, with the use of angles, lighting or exposure, so even before Photoshop, beauty products still sold. If Photoshop was no longer used to sell products it wouldn’t impact sales greatly, if at all.
            Similarly to Vivian Diller, Harper Yi agrees that Photoshopping of models shouldn’t be considered fiction, stating from HerCampus website, “Our ideas about our bodies are not solely based on real-life experiences, but the messages we consume every day and the patterns we see in the media. Say all you want about how magazines aren’t made to be a reflection on reality, but magazines are not considered fiction and it’s time we recognized that the bodies of women and girls should not fall under that category either”. As it is right now, most women on the covers of magazines are fiction. Most times there’s no way to have the flawless skin they do, or the prefect curves they have or the 0% body fat, so it’s pure fiction. So as Harper Yi says, why is it fiction? In essence, it shouldn’t be.


          These pictures initially came from a video originally made for GlobalDemocracy.com. The top picture being the version after Photoshop and the bottom being before the use of Photoshop. Shocking isn’t it? It looks almost like an entirely different person from one picture to another. So, as Alice Chen said an image is “altered without losing what that image is at its core”. What core is left though? Her waist has changed, her facial features have changed, her height has changed, her eye color changed, her weight has changed and her skin color has changed so where’s the core? Every single aspect has been changed to meet what media expects to see from a perfect model. However, there isn’t any form of the original image left.
            Yet we judge those who are depressed or overweight or don’t fit that idea of “perfection” as presented by media. We don’t know their stories though, so for us to judge a book by its cover isn’t the best thing to do. To put things into perspective “47% of girls in 5th-12th grade reported wanting to lose weight because of magazine pictures. 69% of girls in 5th-12th grade reported that magazine pictures influenced their idea of a perfect body shape. 42% of 1st-3rd grade girls want to be thinner. 81% of 10 year olds are afraid of being fat.” according to the National Association of Anorexia Nervosa and Associated Disorders. A picture is painstakingly painted from these facts. Photoshop is altering the minds of this generations children. 1st-3rd grade girls have self-esteem problems, self-esteem shouldn’t even be a concern to them at this point. Due to magazines though, it is. Setting them up for more self-esteem issues and possibly emotional problems or disorders later in life. So the next time you see any type of ad with a model on it think about what that ad means to you, what it does to you. Think, would it be better for us, better for you, better for your family and better for our society if Photoshop wasn’t allowed to create the “perfect” person?









Works Cited:

            Yi, Harper. "Op-Ed: Why I Am Against the Photoshopping of Women's Bodies." Her Campus. Style, 3 Aug. 2012. Web. 01 Dec. 2015.
            Chen, Alice. "Op-Ed: In Defense of Photoshop: Why Magazines Should Photoshop Their Models." Her Campus. Style, 2 Aug. 2012. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.
            Wilson, Eric. "Smile and Say ‘No Photoshop’." The New York Times. The New York Times, 27 May 2009. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.
            Diller, Ph.D. Vivian. "Is Photoshop Destroying America's Body Image?" The Huffington Post. TheHuffingtonPost.com, 7 Aug. 2011. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.
            GlobalDemocracy.com. "Body Evolution - Model Before and After." YouTube. YouTube, 22 May 2012. Web. 02 Dec. 2015.

            ANAD. "ANAD." Eating Disorders Statistics. ANAD, n.d. Web. 03 Dec. 2015.

Tuesday, December 1, 2015

Mataya Giffey Analyzing an Argument Paper #3

Mataya Giffey Analyzing an Argument
1.       What is the claim?
a.       She is trying to say that we, as a society, are too depended on technology.
b.      It is clearly stated and it lies in the middle of the intro paragraph.
2.       What support does the writer offer for the claim?
a.       It effects our overall health, abilities and actions.
b.      There are multiple facts and testimonials and an example that back up her claim.
c.       The reasons are plausible and sufficient
3.       How evenhandedly does the writer present the issues?
a.       There are two counterarguments, those being, technology has made the economy better and safer and being able to communicate with family and staying up to date. She addresses them and then provides and immediate rebuttal.
b.      Acknowledging them and then responding reasonably.
c.       They’re regarded respectively.
d.      No large generalizations and qualified.
4.       What authorities or sources of outside information does the writer use?
a.       They’re used either for statistics or testimonials incorporating them effectively.
b.      They’re all credible.
c.       Generally current.
5.       How does the writer address you as the reader?
a.       Yes, the writer is assuming we all know what technology is and what forms it comes in.
b.      Yes, I am included within the piece.

c.       It seems that the author and I share the idea of technology being overused as is. 

Paper #3 Rough

Christopher Burning
English 101-5:30
Dr. Sonia Begert
11/26/15
Photoshop, the Power of God in Your Hands: For Good or for Evil?
            Advances in technology in the recent years have given people the power to transform the way people look to their desire. Initially it wasn’t something to be too concerned about. However, as people have learned these programs and as they have advanced more is now possible than before with Photoshop. Transformations to models on magazines are now so unobtainable with this program that it’s causing more harm than good, both mentally and physically. So, is Photoshop for the better or for the worse in this day and age?
            Images have always been altered, well before Photoshop. Whether it was through the use of angles, lighting or exposure, image altering has existed for a long time. Though as technology has developed so has different kinds of software: one of those being Photoshop. The problem with it is that the use of Photoshop on models has now gone to the extreme. I surveyed ten of my good friends and family through Facebook and asked, “Do you believe that the Photoshoping of models on magazine covers accurately represents what is obtainable or do you think they're outlandish”? Every single one of the people who responded thought that the use of Photoshop as it is today, is outlandish and too extreme. Furthering onto the idea that Photoshop has been taken to the extreme Vivian Diller, Ph.D, wrote an article in the Huffington Post and quoted The American Medical Association saying, “alterations made through processes like Photoshop can contribute to unrealistic body image expectations, eating disorders and other emotional problems”. So considering it can cause a slew of physical and mental disorders and it being completely outlandish, what’s the positivity of it?
            Well according to Alice Chen, for the use of Photoshop, in HerCampus website, the author states, “As an editorial publication, a magazine strives to meet its standards of perfection. In the same way that an article passes through the hands of multiple editors, a photo experiences a meticulous retouching process in order to represent the best version of itself. And like the words in a written piece may change during the process, the colors, textures, shapes and other details of a photo may be altered without losing what that image is at its core”. However, consider the amount of altering a photo can go through for an ad, not even a magazine cover but just an ad. The ways in which an image can be altered is astounding. They can change the skin color, lip color, eye color, remove blemishes, extend the length of the persons’ body, change breast size, eye size, hip and waist size including many more not listed. So if all of those things are changed has the image really kept what it is at its core? Why should a photo have to go through retouching to represent the best version of itself? If an image is to really represent itself, let it represent reality and not a fantasy that Photoshop force feeds you. Another argument that is argued is that if Photoshop wasn’t allowed to be used on models or in magazines or in ads that it would put many people out of jobs. Yes, that would be true, many people would lose their jobs, but with the marketing being the way it is, instantly there would a large demand in photographers or makeup artists so, yes, it would destroy jobs but at the same time it would create the same amount that were lost, if not more. Another point that comes from opposing side is that without the use of Photoshop makeup sales would drop or anything that uses enhanced images to sell their product. However, as mentioned earlier Photographs have always been altered, with the use of angles, lighting or exposure, so even before Photoshop beauty products still sold. If Photoshop was no longer used to sell products it wouldn’t impact sales greatly, if at all.
            Similarly to Vivian Diller, Harper Yi agrees that Photoshopping of models shouldn’t be considered fiction, stating from HerCampus website, “Our ideas about our bodies are not solely based on real-life experiences, but the messages we consume every day and the patterns we see in the media. Say all you want about how magazines aren’t made to be a reflection on reality, but magazines are not considered fiction and it’s time we recognized that the bodies of women and girls should not fall under that category either”. As it is right now, most women on the covers of magazines are fiction. Most times there’s no way to have the flawless skin they do, or the prefect curves they have or the 0% body fat, so it’s pure fiction. So as Harper Yi says, why is it fiction?
Works Cited:
            Yi, Harper. "Op-Ed: Why I Am Against the Photoshopping of Women's Bodies." Her Campus. Style, 3 Aug. 2012. Web. 01 Dec. 2015.
            Chen, Alice. "Op-Ed: In Defense of Photoshop: Why Magazines Should Photoshop Their Models." Her Campus. Style, 2 Aug. 2012. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.
            Wilson, Eric. "Smile and Say ‘No Photoshop’." The New York Times. The New York Times, 27 May 2009. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.

            Diller, Ph.D. Vivian. "Is Photoshop Destroying America's Body Image?" The Huffington Post. TheHuffingtonPost.com, 7 Aug. 2011. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.


Tuesday, November 24, 2015

Paper 3 rough outline

Christopher Burning
English 101-5:30
Dr. Sonia Begert
11/23/15
Rough Draft for Position Paper
·         Opening/ Hook: Rhetorical question/ stunning fact.
·         Paragraph one: possible survey conducted by myself or another
·         Paragraph two: argument presented by source 2
·         Paragraph three: counter argument presented by source 1
·         Paragraph four: argument presented by source 3 refuting the counterargument

·         Closing: Conclusion or summary

Thursday, November 19, 2015

Incorporating Sources Effectively



Chen, Alice. "Op-Ed: In Defense of Photoshop: Why Magazines Should Photoshop Their Models." Her Campus. Style, 2 Aug. 2012. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.


In an article by Alice Chen in HerCampus website, the author states, “As an editorial publication, a magazine strives to meet its standards of perfection. In the same way that an article passes through the hands of multiple editors, a photo experiences a meticulous retouching process in order to represent the best version of itself. And like the words in a written piece may change during the process, the colors, textures, shapes and other details of a photo may be altered without losing what that image is at its core.


Wilson, Eric. "Smile and Say ‘No Photoshop’." The New York Times. The New York Times, 27 May 2009. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.

In the New York Times article concerning PhotoShopping of models, Eric Wilson indicates that the amount of PhotoShopping that happens now is astounding. Images have always been effected in one way or another. Whether that be the use of lighting, exposure, angles but more recently software. The use of software in this age has taken models to the point of  unrealistic and unreachable levels of perfection. In some ways they look like creatures from another planet.


Diller, Ph.D. Vivian. "Is Photoshop Destroying America's Body Image?" The Huffington Post. TheHuffingtonPost.com, 7 Aug. 2011. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.

According to Vivian Diller, Ph.D psychologist in private practice, "Photoshop can contribute to unrealistic body image expectations, eating disorders and other emotional problems. Surprisingly, professional and public reactions are mixed." In her article entitled "Is PhotoShop destroying Americas Body Image?"

Spriggs essay and personal essay analyses

1.      The Sprigg’s essay is Sprigg’s forming and sharing her opinion on local grown organic produce. Her opinion was expressed that the advantages of locally owned farms outweigh the disadvantages. She then presented very picky counterarguments that counter argued her point so her position looked stronger.

2.      The second article we analyzed was about the legalization of marijuana in Colorado. The article was more pro legalization of marijuana because the data supports that highway fatalities have decreased since the legalization of marijuana. Some counterarguments that they made were that the anti-pot group, SAM pointed out that even before the first legal pot store opened in Washington State, the number of driver in that state testing positive for pot jumped by one-third.

3.      The last article we analyzed was the unrealistic nature of Photoshop and people to what we accept as “standard”. It was mainly against it due to the number of facts represented in the article. For example, from the 1990’s to now, due to photo shopping there has been an 119% increase in eating disorders for children 12 years and younger.

4.      The Sprigg’s essay and our analyzed articles differentiate due to lack of counterarguments in the positive and/or negative positions. The articles are more statistical-based, rather than the Sprigg’s essay which is more observational. However, the Sprigg’s essay and the analyzed articles are all similar in the way that they all have a very strong stance and position on their topic.   

Katherine Spriggs Essay Questions Response

1. To me it's obvious that this is a topic that matters to her a lot because she has so many personal connections to it. She has also convinced me that it matters. She did this through the use of her rationalizing and her facts and statements. Something that also plays into me being convinced is my education in Environmental Science so I know that what she's saying has ground to it.
2. Spriggs acknowledges the counterargument of buying locally can effect both the environment and economy negatively. She responds to the environmental effect by stating that it would be a waste to try to grow every kind of food locally but she then says that "buying local should instead focus on buying as much as possible from nearby farmers". She responds to the economic factor by saying that it would probably effect the global economy but improve local ones.
3. Paragraph eight and nine are good examples of the essay being effective. In these parts the essay uses an explicit position, good reasons and evidence, attention to more than one point of view and a response to what others have said or done.
4. The first photo helps support her argument because it gives an example of an easy way to buy local. The second and third photos provide significant contrast. The second photo shows a small poly-culture farm which seems nice and quaint and sustainable while the second photo shows an industrial mono-culture farm which, from the angle it's taken, seems unsustainable and very bland and not inviting. The fourth photo gives us an idea of how many trucks are on the roads when traveling because it shows just one car and three massive semi trucks and one box truck. Giving the impression that it could be too much.